Friday Night from The Cottage of Blog
I just watched Kate and Leopold (again) this evening. I wanted to get a closer look of my hero Hugh Jackman. He is my prototype hero. I'd go back in time with him anyday. If he were a vampire, he could bite me on my neck. (sigh)
Chapter 20 is progressing. I've changed the whole thrust, but now I'm coming up to the fight scene, and I'm realizing I'm not very good at this. Fighting really is a little more than just pulling out a gun and squeezing the trigger. I mean people do move out of hte way. They grab at you, try to knock you down. You grab them pull them onto the dirt. Someone tries to kill the bad guy but you keep getting in the way of their aim. Then theres the senses. sweat, taste of blood, pain of a broken bone (I wonder what that feels like? I can't begin to describe it) smell of sweat--eyes wide open with shock? Thank you Holly Lisle. She says keep your sentences short, kill the adverbs and adjectives, use good verbs and nouns--strong ones. Write with a sharp-hard edge. So what's so hard about that? Maybe I'll read some Louis L'Amour. I understand he's a master at fight scenes.
I have reached page 315 though. that's a vast improvement.
I'd thought about submitting the first 30 pages to a few contests in September. Bruce read my first chapter and after all the critiquers who'd helped me--we (he) found 4 yours in a row and each one should have been you're. Unbelievable. I KNOW better.
So on to find a good fight scene somewhere to get some ideas. Anyone out there know anything about fight scenes? 5 goons 3 good guys and a kid who ambushes the bad guys from above.
Happy reading, writing and revising from
The Cottage of Blog
Pat
Chapter 20 is progressing. I've changed the whole thrust, but now I'm coming up to the fight scene, and I'm realizing I'm not very good at this. Fighting really is a little more than just pulling out a gun and squeezing the trigger. I mean people do move out of hte way. They grab at you, try to knock you down. You grab them pull them onto the dirt. Someone tries to kill the bad guy but you keep getting in the way of their aim. Then theres the senses. sweat, taste of blood, pain of a broken bone (I wonder what that feels like? I can't begin to describe it) smell of sweat--eyes wide open with shock? Thank you Holly Lisle. She says keep your sentences short, kill the adverbs and adjectives, use good verbs and nouns--strong ones. Write with a sharp-hard edge. So what's so hard about that? Maybe I'll read some Louis L'Amour. I understand he's a master at fight scenes.
I have reached page 315 though. that's a vast improvement.
I'd thought about submitting the first 30 pages to a few contests in September. Bruce read my first chapter and after all the critiquers who'd helped me--we (he) found 4 yours in a row and each one should have been you're. Unbelievable. I KNOW better.
So on to find a good fight scene somewhere to get some ideas. Anyone out there know anything about fight scenes? 5 goons 3 good guys and a kid who ambushes the bad guys from above.
Happy reading, writing and revising from
The Cottage of Blog
Pat
posted by Unknown at 9:58 PM
2 Comments:
Hey Pat,
Don't sweat those four Yours in a row. Its amazing what gets missed in a manuscript. Totally amazing. I had my first chapter out to somewhere over a dozen contests, and that was after having like a dozen people crit it for me.
And months later, long after I got the results back from the contests I'd entered, I decided to sit down and read it. It amazed me to find multiple mistakes. So I went back over the contest copies to see if any of the judges had noticed them. Not one had. And they were glaring. It was quite an eye opener.
On having trouble with the fight scenes. Oh, you are so NOT alone. Most people I know have trouble with those. My Crit partner agonizes over them. The funny thing is that she's somehow found herself in the KICKASS heroine niche--so she has to come up with alot of these scenes.
lol
Anyway-- just don't forget the emotions when you get down the action. IMO-- the emotion, the feeling--whether its fear, adreline, fury are what push those fight scenes into the upper level.
Best of luck
Theresa
Great work on your book!
And about Hugh Jackman...hell girl he could bite my whole head off and that would be okay too!
:-)
Cindy
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